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How can with my poor words I hope to speak
Of when I first beheld thy brilliant sight
For what art I posess is far to meek
To give but pale reflections of thy might
Yet though my senses could not comprehend
My soul was flooded with thine holy light
Which seemed akin an ocean without end
Upon its waves there is a vessel weak
That is my life which I to thee commend
©2007-2010 *Ingideon
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The third of the Poems, that I have written for the MUD Lusternia, it is another Starhymn, this time for Elohora, the Lady of Eternal Light.

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:iconsyroya:
Nice poem. :)
Don't have any real critique.

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:iconingideon:
Thank you for my very first comment :D.
I'm glad you liked it.
:iconjeshi-weshi:
It is a very good poem, messages behind the lines, I really like the way he structured the poem :)

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:iconingideon:
Thank you for the comment, I am happy that you like the structure and content :)
:iconjeshi-weshi:
:) No worries! :)

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